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how is it i feel the world spinning with me im spinning too w e a v i n g webs and webs of questions that suck my belly like hungry dragons with tapeworms s t u c k inside ?
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Version 3--yes, dammit, that's right. And hopefully the final.
Just one more question--what about, for the last two lines:
the world lies, still beneath my feet,
but I know it is spinning.
hrmmmm?
how is it
i feel the world
spinning with me
im spinning too
w e a v i n g
webs and webs
of questions
that suck my belly
like hungry dragons
with tapeworms
s
t
u
c
k
inside
?
So I say no comma. Let 'em ponder over it and figure it out on their own, dammit! I'm grading papers...AHHHH!
ok. No comma. Now it's done.
Whew. Is it poetry contest material...?
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