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I don't know. I think it makes plenty of sense though. Perhaps the nice thing about this piece is that others who have lost somebody perhaps can relate, can draw meaning from this. There's some great things happening here, with the juxtaposition of the world with your father--perhaps they're one and the same, and this idea of knowing something but not quite being able to comprehend it (the moving earth and the loss of a loved one). The second to last line and the double meaning of "still" really drove that home for me. I like the black hole for questions as well. The piece may seem vague, but after reading it through it's really quite complete and tight. I like it. It's short, concise, and lays out some strong images and huge ideas, powerful emotions very vividly. I think I like it better than anything you've yet posted--not that your other stuff isn't good, but this one's a heavy hitter, I think. I'll sleep on it, but for now have no suggestions for improvement.
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How can I possibly describe the feelings about my Dad's departure? This is an attempt--coming from a somewhat black mood, clearly--but honest.
Does it make enough sense?
I don't know. I think it makes plenty of sense though. Perhaps the nice thing about this piece is that others who have lost somebody perhaps can relate, can draw meaning from this. There's some great things happening here, with the juxtaposition of the world with your father--perhaps they're one and the same, and this idea of knowing something but not quite being able to comprehend it (the moving earth and the loss of a loved one). The second to last line and the double meaning of "still" really drove that home for me. I like the black hole for questions as well. The piece may seem vague, but after reading it through it's really quite complete and tight. I like it. It's short, concise, and lays out some strong images and huge ideas, powerful emotions very vividly. I think I like it better than anything you've yet posted--not that your other stuff isn't good, but this one's a heavy hitter, I think. I'll sleep on it, but for now have no suggestions for improvement.
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